tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7248059698236018186.post6172935788040257515..comments2023-04-03T04:34:00.446-07:00Comments on Lynn Crain's XtraOrdinary Romance: Sneak Peek Sunday ~ The Harvester ~ @oddlynn3 #SPeekSundayLynn Crainhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17563978872099232823noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7248059698236018186.post-30377659873599207972013-05-27T17:44:32.944-07:002013-05-27T17:44:32.944-07:00You're coming along nicely in your story and y...You're coming along nicely in your story and you have a very interesting concept. There are a couple things I'd like to suggest: first, having your harvester use the word 'package' is kind of like having her call it a 'thingy'. It kind of robs her of a shade of credibility and you don't want to do that with such a strong character. And second, 'insure' is the wrong word. I believe you want 'ensure'. Again, these are my opinions and you as the author have every right to discard them as such.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com